Irene Adler

[IRENE ADLER]

Hi, my name is Genterx . Gent, or stephy and this is my Firt character. I found this site through Through caution 2.0. Something you should know about me is I love to rp and am really nice and love to have multiple threads.

Irene Sophie Adler
High Class

Canon: Sherlock Holmes
Custom Title: Killer queen
PHYSICAL
Age: 28
Gender: female
Appearance:

[/b]Blue
Height: 5.9
Body: Curvy slim, frail.
Other distinguishing features: Her hair and eyes and lips.
Wardrobe: Classy long dresses from Chanell, Cartier, and also the occasional long sleve shirt as well. She likes to dress up a lot and use lots of hats and jewelery she loves jewlery. [/ul]
Play By: Eva green


PERSONALITY
General personality:
Irene can be unpredicatble you can never know what she is thinking about and she changes her mind very often and likes it that way . She is also a very well known flirt and loves to play games with the men of her life when she can, this is because she wants to protect her heart, as well as he respect and position from where she is. She is also very good with words and can convice someone easily out of doing anything. She can also lie and deceive very easily someone who she does not trust or does not want to give up the information to this of course does not mean people can't trust ehr its just that she has an agenda which she would rather not talk about her personal things rather than do talk about them.


Quotes, frequently used expressions: Sighning, smiling, Quirking her eye brow
Likes:

• Diamonds
  
• Teasing
  
• Stealing
  
• Explosives
  

Dislikes: (please list three)

• Being told what to do
  
• Stalkers
  
• Being stared at
  

Strengths: Good with a knife, gerat pickpocket, Flirting, finding information
Weaknesses:Sherlock holmes, gifts, water.

BACKGROUND
Family: Her mother Mary Adler Desceased she never knew her father.
Date of Birth: 8 of december 1982
Education: Prestigious Catholic school
Occupation: Serial killer, bank robber, terrorist.
Worst past experience:Almost being drowned because she did not complete a job that she had to do
Best past experience: The time she spent with sherlock .
Image: People see Irene as rather reserved and misteryous because she would rather not talk about anything that her past might show. She also shows security and respect for herself, she is also very beautiful to the male eye and can seem like the perfect beauty until she shows her deadly arts. like swords and knifes.

History:Irene was born in england to her Mother Mary Adler, a single mother who loved Irene with her dear life, and brought up her girl to be a honest and bright young lady. But Irene had other plans in mind that she could really not tell her mother at all , and would rather have kept them secret. Some of those secrets involved robberies and gangs as well as the odd job and two that she did while growing up, until her mother had found out about it and told her that she was in a deep mess , and that she had not raised her to be that way. she was 20 when she left her home and never looked back she moved to London her home for a long time.

Then she met him, the man who would change her life forever Sherlock Holmes the detective and a person who she could call her equal had appeared in her life. How they met was trully fate, she was passing by finishing a job when she saw a man that had spotted her and had found her out , she asked him if he could help her get away and she was invited into his home where they both started to have feelings for one another. In the end he had found out more about her jobs and past and thats when things fell off and she ran away and started to see other men ,work on other things leave the past , to the past.That was when she met a very good man at a party that would change her future forever. How fortunate she had been to meet him and join his little troupe, even at one point getting personal with him was a very good treat, his name was Archibal and he was the second hand man of Johnny Quid the singer.

She moved to the states from england after meeting Archy , Archibal for a full name. He was the only man who understood her and knew exactly what she just wanted in life , that was when he started to introduce her to the world of the crime industry . He gave her a new twist in life , new few jobs, some killing, others robberies, others seeing if drugs where passed and dealt with. This was all good fun in its time ,until she found out what she really wanted to do. She wanted to go to New york, what would she do there archibal asked her and she replied to get as much cash as possible and to finally settle down in a confortable life but she also thought about him sherlock holmes the man who had changed her life, the only man who she had fallen in love with that was her other reason but she would not tell him that.

THE SAMPLE
In Character Sample:

Irene walked away from the hotel, her cell ringing as she picked it hearing a males voice at the other end, he was offering her a job as se replied "hey lets talk the details over dinner tomorrow at the belagio 8 oclock " she said and hangged up the phone. She was planning on visiting her dear love sherlock, Since she had found out that he currently owned a flat in one of the pretties areas of new york, she would be dancing for joy if she got to see him but would he let her in she wonderered. Their last encounter did not last long, and it only ended in him mumbling words from his mouth.

Sherlock and she where not ever in very good terms since the last time that she was with him, well they had shagged one another. But then she ended up regretting it and running away again , that was what she liked about him that he was smart and on his toes, he could grasp any girl he wanted with just those two things.

In fact she was wondering if he had another dame in his life, and if he did well nothing that a good sleeping pill could not help to persuade him to be with her for all eternity. In reality he did promise her that she would be the only one, but archie was an exception she really liked him and she was wondering how he would react to her telling him that she had been with a mafia lord.

The expression on his face would be priceless, she suddenly remembered if she had brought her camera over to capture the moment. If she did not she would be really dissapointed in herself , god she was starting to get butterflies because of the excitment.She really was just going to passs by and say hello ,but would he be home and if not well then she could just use her years of experience to get in without a key. Oh this was going to be a very good day she could tell, just by what was going on through her head.

Tell us WHY your original character would fit with the theme of this board: (Provide two paragraphs here - only use this if you are applying with an original character. If you are applying with a canon character, there is no need to fill out this section.)

[hamlet]

Alright this is good. However, there are a few things I'm concerned with. Don't get freaked out by this posts length, I'm just being thorough so I'm clear about what I'm asking

But then she ended up trying to kill him which failed miserably of course,

When did this happen? I don't see this any where in your history. Generally it shouldn't be unless you and Sherlock discussed this detail (as I don't remember Irene trying to kill Sherlock in the stories, but I could be wrong.) If you guys have discussed this detail or if it is in the original story, I apologize.

Secondly, please be careful about punctuation. Sometimes the lack of punctuation made some sentences hard to read. For instance:

But in the end he had found out about her jobs and past and thats when things fell off and she ran away and started to see other men work on other things leave the past to the past that was when she met a very good man at a party that would change her future forever.

Should be:

But in the end, he had found out about her jobs and past. Thats when things fell off and she ran away. She started to see other men, work on other things, leaving the past to the past. That was when she met a very good man at a party that would change her future forever.

Notice I broke this sentence up a few times in order to be a bit clear. There are other sentences that are very long and could be split for clarification's sake, such as :

She wanted to go to New york, what would she do there archibal asked her and she replied to get as much cash as possible and to finally settle down in a confortable life but she also thought about him sherlock holmes the man who had changed her life, the only man who she had fallen in love with.

In fact she was wondering if he had another dame in his life, and if he did well nothing that a good sleeping pill could not help to persuade him to be with her for all eternity, but in reality he did promise her that she would be the only one, but archie was an exception she really liked him and she was wondering how he would react to her telling him that she had been with a mafia lord.

The above paragraph is one long sentence.

So basically all that needs to be done is some editing. I'm only noting this because without the proper punctuation the sentences were difficult to understand. But all you need is to do a little editing and you'll be on your way to acceptance

[IRENE ADLER]

Edited.

[hamlet]

Ok this is better, therefore Im going to accept this. But please continue to edit your posts in the future as there are still some sentences in your application that need refining. For instance, these sentences are still either very long or a bit confusing due to punctuation.

She wanted to go to New york, what would she do there archibal asked her and she replied to get as much cash as possible and to finally settle down in a confortable life but she also thought about him sherlock holmes the man who had changed her life, the only man who she had fallen in love with that was her other reason but she would not tell him that.

In fact she was wondering if he had another dame in his life, and if he did well nothing that a good sleeping pill could not help to persuade him to be with her for all eternity

(I could read this "If he had another dame in his life, and if he did well." If he did what well? But with punctuation its clear that "if he had another dame in his life and, if he did, well, nothing that a good sleeping pill could not help to persuade...")

So just be extra careful of this in your posts.